I've been working on a story for a while. Then my computer crashed and I lost all the progress I'd made on it. So now I'm retyping the opening that I hand wrote and am remembering what my plot was and am trying to decide where I want it to go. Nonetheless, I could use some feedback. So here's my opening paragraph.
The rain beat down on the pavement as she peered outside between the blinds. "Another fucking rainy day" she sighed with impatience. It had been raining for the last four months almost daily. Not the satisfying downpour of a thunderstorm, but the persistant drizzling like a child's constant "why?". Most of the time the rain suited her mood, but today was different. Today she had wanted sun. Nonetheless, she put a smile on her face as she finished tying the noose to the overhead beam, slipped the loop over her head and kicked the chair out from beneath her. She dangled there, her eyes bulging. Her last thought as she surrendered to unconsciousness was "Finally".
let me know your thoughts. Other than that it's dark. I know it's dark. I wrote it.
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